Here you go Rick…
When I first set eyes on this one, my immedite reaction was to do something whimsical and punny. It behooved me to milk it for all it was worth, something mad, cowardly steering you…
Well, you get the picture. However, after still being awake at 5:30 on Saturday morning (not by choice), the title came to me and from there the words morphed and were fit into place. I give you…
MAELSTROM
The swirling twisting light
Reaching from the height
Ever struggling below
Creative patterns flow
Clamouring with no sounds
Chaotic mass abounds
Emotions deeply delved
The damage never shelved
Drop all discordant thought
Patterns viewed or not
Visions seldom granted
When flexing power slanted
Something different today
A veil is pulled away
Amidst the frantic dawn
Before the light moves on
Centered on solid ground
A totem will be found
Standing in a field
Your animal revealed
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Hmmm, it seems I did manage to retain one very subtle pun at the end there π

you are a NUT! i love it. it’s great!
By: rick on May 25, 2008
at 4:20 pm
Superb……………..
Peace,
By: misterbooks on May 26, 2008
at 7:43 am
And it’s much better now that it is formatted as I originally intended (four stanzas of paired rhyming couplets – as you see it now) NOT as just one big stanza. Sorry to those who had to read it the other way.
By: Arkay on May 26, 2008
at 2:26 pm
Damn son — youz a poet!
By: Greybeard on May 29, 2008
at 5:43 pm
Wahoo!! This is really COOL!
By: beartwinsmom on May 29, 2008
at 6:17 pm
Beautiful sound. I loved the lifting of the veil to reveal a totem. Great flow to this poem.
By: mariacristina on June 3, 2008
at 5:22 pm
Nah Greybeard, ’cause if I knew it, I wouldn’t do it π
Thx bear. That’s my first blog ‘wahoo!’ ever. *blushes*
Hi mariachristina. Thanks for visiting and your kind comments. I too like the ‘sound’ of this one.
By: Arkay on June 4, 2008
at 4:11 pm
[…] Arkay, of the pessimistic idealist, wrote MAELSTROM […]
By: new arrivals, new arrangements « the storybook collaborative on June 18, 2008
at 9:37 pm
Somehow i missed the point. Probably lost in translation π Anyway … nice blog to visit.
cheers, Computerized
By: Computerized on June 20, 2008
at 2:56 pm
ehhheeeh… reVEALed…
By: Banana on January 20, 2009
at 5:28 am
*pat’s self on back* …Ya, that was one of my best ones in there *grin*
By: Arkay on January 20, 2009
at 3:18 pm